The Price of Sin

Saturday, May 21, 2011

Warning: this post contains some sexual and some violent references & imagery that are probably NSFW. Reader discretion advised!

Were it not the middle of endless summer, it would have seemed the Blue Bottega was lit up with Christmas lights; it was so aglow, Jebidiah mused that astronauts would've seen it as a bright spot from space.

Soon enough, neighbors would rise from their beds to see what was the matter, and the curious droves of residents would surround the business and huddle, gossiping amongst themselves as people in Twinbrook always did when anything noteworthy happened in their one-horse town...

At least, today, they'd have something worthwhile to talk about.

Jebidiah supported his wife's weak strides as best as he could as they approached the crime scene, but she clung to his arm so tight he swore he was losing circulation. Meredith had very nearly fallen apart the second he'd told her what had happened--a murder at their family business--but Jeb knew, if it weren't for her, he wouldn't have been able to cope as well as he was.

"They've left skid marks all over my beautiful patio," Meredith lamented as they walked closer, the flashing car lights illuminating the path to the body. "It'll take a week to clean it off." It was petty, but a better focus than on what lied further ahead in their path.

"Are you sure you're okay with this?" Jebidiah asked calmly, squeezing her hand.

"Yeah... yeah, I'm fine," she warbled, unsure.

One look, though, and she suddenly was sure of one thing: she wasn't fine.

"Shark," Jebidiah wheezed under his breath. He'd been one of his greatest henchmen since the very beginning; loyal, dedicated, unquestioning. Next to Marta, there'd been no one in his warehouse he'd trusted more... and Shark had trusted Jebidiah to the very end.

If he hadn't demanded Junior put someone in charge of watching the bogey shipment... if he hadn't been so insistent they catch the thief...

"I-I've changed my m-mind," Meredith wailed as she collapsed, falling into Jebidiah's arms. "I'm not fine."

And she was the lucky one; she hadn't known Shark, not like Jebidiah had. He swallowed, fighting back the urge to leave and do something he'd regret... but as luck would have it, he was too old to be a vigilante.

"Meredith," he uttered in a tempered, stable voice. "Why don't you go inside, find your employee that found the body, and make you both something to drink? Relax until the cops need you, okay?"

"A-alright," Meredith squeaked, shuddering.

"Mere," Jeb insisted. "It'll be okay. Don't worry."

He watched her walk inside with a heavy heart; he honestly wasn't sure, if that was the truth.

A visible change faded onto Tana's face as she turned around and saw Jebidiah approaching. "Good, you're here," she said slowly. A glance was sent towards the doors to the Bottega, where she watched her sister disappear. "I still... I still can't believe it, Jeb. I didn't expect this--not in a million years."

"You don't have to tell me that," Jeb sighed, his brows furrowed. He tried to resist it, but there was no helping it; his eyes kept veering away to the body that laid mere feet away. "What do we know?"

"Blunt force to the head, from what we've gathered. Looks like whoever it was, they were searching through all the crates in the shipment again--obviously didn't find anything, since you had a decoy in instead. When Shark jumped out to confront them, they took one of the crate lids and left an impact right behind his left temple. Whoever it was, they must have been very strong."

"And the evidence? Does it point to a suspect?"

"Not yet," Tana scowled. "But... you look like you have an idea."

"I'm not sure, but I think... Carolina. She had the most to gain from this... But then who broke into the crates the first time? Her daughter?" Jebidiah took a deep breath, pausing for a moment of deep thought. "It's possible that she sent Lisa to look for evidence to incriminate us, and Carolina came back to finish the deed..."

"I just--" There was a moment where Tana looked completely skeptical, but after a moment, her head began to slowly bow into a nod. "--I'll keep that theory in mind. At this point, though, nothing's for certain."

"What, do you still not believe that she's--" However, Jebidiah was cut off, when one of the other officers gathering evidence approached them from the other side of the tape.

"Officer Larson?" he asked, a cellphone pressed up against his cheek. "There's someone who wants to speak with you... Says he's..." He blinked, as if in awe. "He says he's the Governor?"

"Hand it over," Tana growled.

"Yes sir, this is Officer Larson," she spoke into the phone as the other cop handed it over. "I'm the head of the crime scene division... Mhm... Yes... Yes sir..."

"You--you want Mr. Kane to oversee the investigation? But sir, he's not even a licensed--yes, sir, I understand that but--I..." Tana sent a long, hard look at Jebidiah as she listened to Governor Grant's voice over the cellphone. "I see. Well, I'll be sure to inform him. Goodbye, Governor." With that, she slammed her thumb against the 'End Call' button so hard she felt the circuits crunch beneath it.

"Officer Walker... Can you excuse us for a moment?" Tana gave her suboordinate a nod as he walked back to the crime scene, leaving the two to speak in privacy.

"This... This is ridiculous Tana. I don't have time for this! One of my head thieves is dead and you think I'm just going to drop what I'm doing and play pretend Investigator because the Governor believes I'm some genius criminal catcher? It just doesn't work that way, Tana!"

"Well, of course I know it doesn't! I didn't ask for this, Jeb! This is my job he's trying to hand off to you!" Tana threw her hands up in the air, now shaking her head so spitefully her cap fell crooked on her scalp. "And I certainly didn't think it was a good idea for you to set up this little mousetrap, either."

"Oh, so you're saying it's my fault Shark is dead?" This was almost too much for Jebidiah to take. "Look. Fine. I'll help. This is your job, not mine... but if it's the only thing that'll get this woman caught--then so be it."

Unfortunately, there was little else he could do but cooperate; he'd made the Governor put so much faith in him, and he'd convinced Junior and Shark that this plan to catch their thief was a good idea... in the end, it was only:

"Karma," Tana spat. "It's karma. You never think you're low enough to clean up your own damn messes, Jebidiah--but you know what? It's time you stop expecting everyone to just bend over backwards on your whims. Shark is dead, Jebidiah. Dead. How many more of your pawns have to die before you start caring more about our welfare than your stupid games?"

"Tana, that is completely--"

It was as if the red lights from the squad car lit fires in the depths of Tana's eyes, doubling the fury in the glare she sent back at Jebidiah as she wheeled around and sent daggers from her eyes to his. "Clean up. Your own. Mess." With that, she sourly shook her head at him and crossed under the police tape, and out of reach.

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"Lolly! Lolly!"

His fist clenched tighter, pounding harder--harder--threatening to shatter the door's glass with persistence. Still nothing came from inside; the only noise was Travis's breath and the pounding of his heart, still going fast ever since he'd fled from his house to see her. He'd seen the special report... seen flashing images of Shark's body on the evening news. Shark Racket...
... the brother of his lover.

"Lolly, I know you're in there!" Travis belted out, his concern slowly fading into rage the longer she denied his existence. "Don't shut me out, dammit! Let me in!"

Travis couldn't take it anymore; why she refused to acknowledge him was no longer his concern. He just knew he had to be there, had to be with her, had to hold her...

The force of his body slammed the door open, snapping the lock from the frame; Travis barreled through the doorway, but the energy expended just gaining entrance quickly shattered his anger. Now, he only urgently searched for Lolly, desperate to see if she was okay...

... but it wasn't hard. She'd taken no effort in hiding; she was only barely out of eye's view of the front window, curled so tightly that her body hardly moved when the house shook from Travis' dramatic entrance. Lolly didn't even lift her head to look at him, leaving Travis confused, gazing at her with wide, distressed eyes.

"Lolly..." he wheezed. Still, she didn't move. "Oh man, Lolly..."

"Please, please look at me," Travis groaned, collapsing to his knees in front of her chair. She still felt warm when he touched her, but she was lifeless, like a marionette that only shifted at the command of its strings. "I need to know," his voice begged, with a pleading anxiety that a man his age was rarely too vulnerable to expose. "I need to know you're okay."

Her words were few, but when they came--soft and broken--they tore Travis' heart. "I'll never be okay, again."

Travis practically didn't have to tell his arms what to do; they wound protectively around her, pulling her limp body up from its chair so he could hold her tightly to him. "Don't say that," he whispered, his nose pressing against hers. "I'm not leaving until you are--okay? I'm not going anywhere."

But, it was 'anywhere' that served as a cue for Lolly's body to come to life; with one quick shove, she began to try to twist her way out of his arms.

"Lolly, what's--"
"Just let go of me," she cried in a rhaspy voice. "I don't want you here... J-just leave!"

It'd take more than that to convince Travis, though; he only tried to pull her closer, which made her wriggle all that much harder to break free from his arms.

"Alright, Lolly, what is going on." Travis was not only confused, but hurt. He'd dropped everything to come to her side... he'd sacrificed so much, walking out his front door without an explanation why. Was she really this ungrateful?!

But as he spoke, she still refused his advances. "Please, just go."

"I--Lolly, you shouldn't have to do this alone. Please, let me help you!"

"Help me--help me?!" Suddenly, Travis was wishing he'd listened; the look on her face as she wheeled around was nothing but pure fury. "You and your family have already done enough to help me!"

"My fa... What does my family have to do with this?!"

"'Don't get involved with those Kanes,' my father always used to say. 'They won't lead you to anything good'. I should have listened... I should have taken his advice before it was too late."

Travis blinked, dumfounded. "I don't understand."

"Shark worked for your father, Travis. My brother did nothing but worship the ground Jebidiah Kane walked on... saw him as the father mine never was. Trusted him completely... And now, now he's dead because of him. That's the reward he got for loyalty."

"But Lolly... He may be my father, but I'm not involved with him like that. I'm not going to do the same thing to you--can't you see that?"

"No, Travis, I can't. Can you swear to me that my face won't cover the tabloids when someone discovers our affair? Can you swear that I won't lose my job, what family I have left, because of what we're doing?" She scowled, and closed her eyes tightly to fight back tears. "Even if you could, Travis... I don't think I could ever believe you."

"It shouldn't matter, though--Lolly... I lov--"

"No. No... Travis, don't." A mixture of sadness and anger burned bright in Lolly's eyes as she finally made eye contact with him, with a look that scarred him the moment he gazed upon it.

She loved him. She had since the moment they'd first kissed all those years ago, when their only cares were grades and curfews. And, Travis knew, she always would... a fact that made that look all the more painful: a look of despair, a look of disappointment, a look that said nothing would ever be the same again...

With that one look, it was all over.

"Get out, Travis," she whispered, her body quaking. "And please, don't ever come back."

He sat on that front porch for quite some time. Travis wasn't stupid--at least, not stupid enough to expect her to ask him to come back inside--but the weight of it all forced his body to collapse on that top step, shell-shocked, swaying gently with the evening breeze.

In truth, he didn't want to move. He wanted to suffer. Lolly had every right to do what she did--and she should have done it a lot sooner. How more selfish could he have been? His own marriage was going down the drain, so he was prepared to take out Lolly's life with his? "You're a fool," he grumbled to the wind.

If you asked him how he got to the Red Rendezvous that night, Travis wouldn't be able to tell you; it was as if one moment he was on Lolly's cold porch step, and the next his temples were grinding on chalkboards to the sound of the bar's country tunes.

Drink after drink, the world began to fade away, blurring together into this chasm of self-reproach that Travis didn't bother to fight free from. Part of him had hoped the liquid would wash away his pain, but if anything it just made it more vibrant and more tangible. Still... He supposed it was better than going home.

"Excuse me? Excuse me, sir?" The voice came from 50 feet away--the equivalent to 3 in Reality Land. It took a couple of tries for him to actually hear her.

"What," he groaned, clearly not wanting to be bothered.

"Aren't you Travis Kane, the lead pitcher for the Twinbrook Llamas?"

Her shoes were the first thing that he saw; their heels were tall and thin, leading up to a pair of legs that any sober man could easily tell were a cry for attention. They fidgeted as she waited for a response, but Travis had no inclinations to lift his gaze to see the face that was speaking to him.

"Yeah," he finally grumbled. "What of it?"
"I was wondering, do you think I could get a small interview for tomorrow's paper? Something to distract everyone from that horrible murder business?"

It took a few moments, but with a sigh--and barely a shift of any other part of his body--Travis wordlessly nodded towards the seat next to him.

"Don't worry, I'll make it quick," she said in a smart, educated voice. "Let me buy you a drink."

Even better; one less drink he didn't have to worry about putting on his tab.

The interview didn't consist of much; the girl clearly was either some sort of sport's writer or huge fan of his, constantly referring to points in his record that even Travis couldn't remember. She kept the drinks flowing, and that's all that really mattered to him; it kept the pain dull, and kept him forgetting why he felt it in the first place.

After a few more glasses, he finally started to pay more attention to who it was that was enabling his drunkeness. She'd introduced herself some time ago, but between the rattling off of his game figures and the current reign of his MVP status, he'd sort of forgotten to actually pay attention to anything she said about herself. Clearly, she was trying very hard--and Travis couldn't say he didn't appreciate it.

She was cute, too; she had that sexy bookworm look going on, which was doing a remarkable job also distracting him from the words that were coming out of her mouth. At this point, though, he really didn't care.

The stars had long since come out by the time Travis stumbled to the door of the bar, where he had to lean for support just to keep from toppling through the glass. He insisted that he needed to get home, but that he wasn't sure he could make it. He wasn't even sure he'd make it out alive, if he did.

"I just shouldn'tve come here in the first place," he bemoaned himself.
"Don't say that," she said softly, still holding him upright. "We all need to let go a little, sometimes."

Leelee... Le... something... offered to help him outside...

... and then offered to do a lot more than just that...

Unfortunately, it was an offer Travis couldn't refuse.


PiB - Nicarra May 21, 2011 at 5:33 PM  

Wow, that was intense.

Alas, poor Shark. We knew him, Horatio. He has been one of Jeb's key players for such a long time. And sorry Jeb, but everything is definitely not ok. And won't be.

In this case, Karma does bite and big time. Governor Grant has been convinced you clean up crime...which was your idea.


Wow, Lolly really has had a change of heart. And she has let Travis know that she blames the Kane family. Poor Travis, his love life is completely imploding - first Jade doesn't love him and now Lolly never wants to see him again.

So Travis went off to booze it up to ease the pain. Travis, let me help you with the name of your interviewer. It would be Lisa - and I fear that she is Momma's little girl. (Umm, Jeb, did you think to warn your offspring to be cautious?)

Fantastic chapter but I'm going to be scared to open future ones. This season looks to be a real heart stopper by the end.

Sara May 21, 2011 at 6:34 PM  

Oh, Shark is the ONE person I forgot to consider! Well done, Kaleeko (and Carolina ;) ). That line made me laugh so much though... Jeb is sooo not too old to be a vigilante- at least, not in every game. Hehe.

I have to say, I love Tana in that first part. She's being the sole voice of reason in Jeb's little plan, and he clearly doesn't want to hear it.

Oh man, I forgot how Shark's death would affect Lolly! :( Poor thing... this section was so emotional and sad! I know you were worried about it, but it turned out really well. Great screenshots too! Nice use of some of the new poses. That close-up of Lolly gave me goosebumps.

It has to be hard for her... His family's responsible for her brother's death. I can't say I really blame Lolly at all here, even if she isn't fully aware of the whole story. It was still his mother's studio where he was killed and his father Shark was working for, even if she doesn't really know precisely WHY.

Uh oh, Travis's got his beer goggles on. Even if I know how this is going to end based on the Tumblr picture, it's still hilarious/sad to watch it happen. The blurriness is great XD

Look who it iiiis. That's definitely an odd look for her XD

Unknown May 21, 2011 at 7:44 PM  


It was really long since Jeb was in due of some Karma... He did go through a lot with Amelia, but he's never really had to truly 'pay' for his crime.

I kind of loved being able to use Sam as part of that, too--just what I needed, one of his plans to totally backfire on him. XD

Lolly's grown up a LOT since she was a teen--both she and Travis are full Adults, now... Means they're both really starting to reflect on t heir lives. Too bad only one of them is being responsible about it. -_-

Travis has always had a booze problem. XD He needs to attend some AA meetings or something, lol--but unfortunately, even if Jeb had warned him properly (which he may have, never really thought about it), he was waaaayy too schnockered to care.

I did warn that this Season was going to be a soul crusher. D; It all works out eventually, but this storyline is a pretty huge turning point for the Kane family... and what canni say; love me some drama. ^^

Thank you, PiB! <333

Unknown May 21, 2011 at 8:00 PM  


Heheheh!!! Yeah--Shark is overlooked because I haven't REALLY featured him much; he's there, but he never says anything. The 'silent' one of the bunch... Junior was also under consideration for the chopping block, but I wanted someone that'd been around longer, and not quite as near-and-dear as Marta. ;D

Tana's a smart cookie. XD I wish I had had her around more, in the olden days, because she's a good counterpart to Jeb. He totally deserves what she says, too.

Awww--thank you. <333 I'm not sure why I was worried, but I'm glad that the section with Lolly came out as it did. It's cool, to see how much she's changed from when she was a crazy teenager. It definitely took a lot of time, though.

Beer goggles on--LOL. I was actually REALLY tempted to use that phrase in the storym, but I couldn't figure out how to use it.

Doing that smexy scene was great. XD I like the one I posted on Tumblr more, but I didn't want anything TOO racy for the post, just for the sake of staying semi kosher. Hehehe.

Thanks, Amelia! /muah <333

Chrysame May 21, 2011 at 8:46 PM  

Such a sad post and the Beck song really emphasized all the emotions you were trying to convey.

Travis don't sleep with that girl. She's evil just like her Momma!!

It always gets darkest before the dawn right? I have a bad feeling that it's going to get real dark real soon.

Wyatt looks so cute as a cop. Can you imagine how many criminals hope that he's the sim that arrests them so they can pass time at the jail with Officer Wyatt and his nightstick? o.O

The way you've treated Lolly throughout this blog has been quite the journey. I've enjoyed it very much.

Unknown May 21, 2011 at 9:28 PM  


<33333 Aww! Thanks for mentioning the song--I was wondering if anyone listened to it while reading. It honestly totally inspired the theme of those post.

You're right; it's darkest before the dawn... but the dawn is a looonng ways off. They all have a rough road ahead of them.

OH MAN Chrysame. *dies laughing!* I can see it now... Inmates drawing little hearts in the air as Officer Wyatt walks by. ;D He's a total heartthrob, ain't he?

I'm glad that you've felt the Lolly roller-coaster, too; she was a character that always drove me nuts, but even as the writer she found a way to win me over in the end.

Thank you so much, Chrysame! *glomp* <333

Unknown May 21, 2011 at 9:31 PM  


To those who are... curious... there are a lot of shots from this post I cut out; I only needed a couple, so I took a ton of extras trying to get the right angles, and some of them turned out pretty smokin'. So I am going to share. ;D

WARNING: Mature imagery. ;)

I think #10 is my fave. <3

Chrysame May 21, 2011 at 9:37 PM  

Picture 10 is very sexy. I like number 11. It's more graphic but the placement of her raised leg is perfect. Travis defines the saying thinks with his little brain.

Unknown May 21, 2011 at 9:42 PM  

*snicker* Oh ye with dirty mind! <3 ;) Not that I'm ANY better, I obviously set the shots up in the first place...

You are totally right--Travis's real brain just isn't smart/strong enough to control his impulses. -_- And the booze doesn't help!

PiB - Nicarra May 21, 2011 at 9:44 PM  

Number 11 is my fav too.

I did listen to the song as I read the last bit, just forgot to comment - not to mention I didn't want to look like I was trying to take over your wall with a comment that went on longer than the post. :)

Way back when this season was starting I might have said something to the effect of "Wouldn't it be interesting to see Jeb fail?" That's still an interesting idea, but the fact that it might badly damage the whole family wasn't a thought I had in mind.

Chrysame May 21, 2011 at 9:49 PM  

Who is next on the hit list? I have a feeling Carolina is going to get her revenge in as many ways as possible. She's had a long time to think about it.

Off topic: I'm watching Saturday Night Live...what the hell is wrong with Lady Gaga? I'm too damn old for this crap. *puts on grumpy face*

Unknown May 21, 2011 at 9:50 PM  

Hahaha, PiB--I hear ya. ;) I seem to have a problem with writing wall-o-comments. XD

I think I recall you saying that--and IIRC, I was a bit amused by it on my end. ;) Unfortunately, Jeb failing requires an Epic Fail, which has far reaching consequences. In the end, he created a monster he couldn't quite control--something his whole family's going to pay for.

Have to say--it was a fun plot to devise. >:D

Unknown May 21, 2011 at 9:52 PM  

My lips are sealed about the hit list. ;) You'll have to speculate amongst yourselves!

Awww... See, I absolutely love Lady Gaga--but she's definitely someone of my generation's mindset. I can understand why she might not appeal to you. ;) <333 Sounds like you may need a different show to watch tonight, though!

Chrysame May 21, 2011 at 10:06 PM  

She's a performance artist. I've never liked performance art even when I was a youngster.

When she pops out of her egg thingy it reminds me of Spinal Tap when the pod wouldn't open and Christopher Guest's character had to perform stuck in the giant pod.

Your generation...pfft. Get off my lawn!

LordCharles May 22, 2011 at 4:26 AM  

Shark!!! Wow, great chapter!!! Is Travis to big of a character to be next on the hit list? He just doesn't have the capability to be faithful, does he?

I think it's good Jeb is in charge of the murder investigation-- he can cover up a lot of stuff that the cops might find.

I'm also really excited for Alesha's baby. Margo's so cute, and it would be adorable to see the two kids playing together!!!


Jen May 23, 2011 at 1:11 AM  

I can see why this chapter was causing you some grief to write, but seriously though you did a fabulous job of it.
The crime scene shots were especially cool as well as the scenes of Travis, enjoying his extra curricular activities. lol

You always seem to capture exactly what your trying to convey. I envy that. ;)

This is going to be fun to see Jeb in charge of the investigation. And he was the one who set up this 'little mousetrap', hmmmm, looks like things back fired on him.
I don't blame Tana for walking off in a huff after telling Jeb he can clean up his own mess. She is risking a lot just knowing what he is up too.

Travis what in the hell are you doing? Honestly.
You picked the perfect song too for his scenes. Man he really just lets go after he's got a few drinks in him. Reminds me of another red head I know. ;)

Can't wait to see where this is all headed. Definitely interesting times ahead for The Kanes!

Jen May 23, 2011 at 1:18 AM  

Damn it! I forgot to mention those extra shots you took.

Whoa, talk about Racy! But great job!

Travis you are such a bad bad boy!

Tender Wolf May 24, 2011 at 10:25 PM  

YAY, ANOTHER CHAPTER!!! :**: Wowza, you really had me on the edge of my seat Kaleeko! Poor Shark! I wonder if Carolina is behind the murder, and if she had her daughter break in to the Botegga the first time. Lisa is Naomi's sister I presume? And what an interesting relationship she's having with Travis. Oh boy...I hope he doesn't end up with another illegitimate child. roflmao Although that would be quite dramatic. :D Lolly clearly wants nothing more to do with him, and if I recall right, her son isn't biologically his, which she confessed in the last chapter.

Another great write Kaleeko, can't wait to read more!!! *waits impatiently*

Anonymous,  May 28, 2011 at 6:11 AM  

An excellent chapter, I feel bad for Shark and Lolly as well.

Unknown May 28, 2011 at 4:08 PM  


Thanks, dear! <333

Yeah, Travis is too main of a character--not that I have a problem killing off main characters, but there won't be any main character deaths this season. ^^ And nooo... His ability to be faithful is just--blech. ;D

You're very right about Jeb--that and he knows the criminals in town better than anyone else--but it puts himself closer to the eye of the law then he'd like to be.

I am WAY excited about Alesha's baby, too... Won't be long til that ray of sunshine (cough) comes into the world!

Thanks for the comments LC, sorry it took me so long to respond! <3

Unknown May 28, 2011 at 4:12 PM  


Awwww. XD Thanks!! The parts with Travis/Lolly were the hardest, since I wanted to make reallyreally sure to create empathy for both parties--neither are perfect, but neither are the 'enemy' either. Just two people that are suffering.

Backfire is right--Jeb's gotta start learning his lessons the hard way. Hopefully Tana will make him listen, buuutt... *chintap*

LOL!! Are you talking about me, missy? ;) ;) *tease* I'm glad you liked the song, though--it's growing to be one of my favorites. I could actually see it capturing the essence of most everything that happens this season... "Everybody's gotta learn sometime."

Thank you sososososo much, Jen--you really are so sweet. <33

Unknown May 28, 2011 at 4:15 PM  


Hehehe! >:D Glad I captured your attention! It definitely was SO intense to write, it took me longer than usual.

Is Carolina behind the murder? Lisa? Someone else? Interesting questions--guess you'll have to see. But as for Lisa--yep, she is Naomi's sister. This is her first real appearance in the story.

Hehehe--is Travis gonna end up with another kid? Man... That would be pretty horrible, wouldn't it? *cackle* But yes, you're right--his first 'illegitamte child' technically isn't even his.

Thank you so much, TW! <333

Unknown May 28, 2011 at 4:16 PM  


Thank you! <3

I definitely feel bad for Lolly--I haven't given her one break since she first entered the story. At least Shark's end was quick; he didn't have to suffer like her. :(

Di Al Martini May 30, 2011 at 7:01 AM  

Great chapter!

It was really intense.

I feel sorry for Travis, but what he did is making it worse.
Did he want to say that he loves Lolly?

It's so close to real life. I mean, some people would do what Travis did, being in a loveless marriage at the moment.

The crime scenes are perfect. Your writing is excellent also.

Can't wait to see the next update.

LordCharles May 30, 2011 at 3:38 PM  

Hi! I just wanted to tell you that I neglected to give my Simself a job before uploading him, but I do work as a 7th grade English teacher, so if you want to you can give him a job at the school as a Middle School Teacher. Thanks!

P.S.- Not to rush you, I'm just wondering when the next chapter might come out.

Unknown May 30, 2011 at 3:52 PM  


Thank you so much, MJ! <333

Travis really is a bit horrible at making great decisions, unfortunately. :( And yes--he did want to tell her he loved her. She wouldn't let him, though... She was in too much pain to want to endure hearing it. T_T

There definitely are a lot of people that seek love elsewhere when they can't find it in their own marriage. Whether they'll still be together or not for much longer because of it... Guess you'll have to see.

Thanks again, dear. *muah!*

Unknown May 30, 2011 at 3:56 PM  


Very cool! But, I actually have Charles le Sim's career and such figured out--but I'll keep that in mind in case I decide to change mind. It's still a while yet before all that will come into the story.

Next post is in the works--got it all screenshotted, just need to write it. I'm guessing, it'll appear tonight or tomorrow. :)

LordCharles May 30, 2011 at 4:03 PM  

Okay. I just didn't want my sim to be running around all unemployed, as he'd probably cause some problems.

Yay! Can't wait!

Tender Wolf May 30, 2011 at 9:51 PM  

I just checked out Yours Truly, Margo again, and I saw a Kenzie link! And an Ian one, which is funny because that's my fiance's name in real life. teehee I wonder what you're going to do with that...both links appear to be empty now but I look forward to reading Margo's blog! :D

Unknown May 30, 2011 at 9:55 PM  


Hehehe, yeah! That's just the 'label sort' menu; those're all the characters that'll appear regularly in her musings. ^-^ That's a cute coincidence, heh!

It's still about a month-ish away from that blog kicking off, but I'm so excited you're looking forward to it! Won't be too long before Kenzie appears here, though... ;)

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